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|  | Sandblown Shell~General~Female « Thread Started on Dec 10, 2007, 4:57pm » | |
Name: Sandblown Shell Age: 22 years Gender: Female Rank: General Mate: Looking Children: Wants them Appearance: Sandblown Shell is a very pretty woman. She has long silky black hair and tan colored skin. Her eyes are a memorizing color blue. She is about 5'4 and is about 115 pounds. Sandblown Shell has a very slim but well built body. She has very tiny hands for her size, but they are powerful. Sandblown Shell has a long blue dress with blue shorts underneath. Her shoes are white colored. Sandblown Shell has a shell bracelet that she got from her mom when she was just a child. The shells are all a purple color and are very small. Personality: Sandblown Shell is a very kind person. She is fair to all and rarely gets a temper. When you do get her angry then you will suffer to the point you wished she has killed you. Sandblown Shell can always tell when you are upset or angry, she can tell just by looking into others eyes. Sandblown Shell is very good with making others feel better and she enjoys helping others. She once thought about becoming a Healer but realized it just wasn't for her. The herbs confused her to much. She takes a lot of seriousness in her role as General, she never lets the fact that she is general affect the way she sees others that are below her in rank. She treats others the way she would like to be treated. Sandblown Shell is also very stubborn. If she thinks one way about something it is hard to get her to change her mind. This is why she would rather help than be helped. History: Childhood:When Sandblown Shell was Young Shell she was very well behaved. Most other parents commented her mother, Water Bear, on how well behaved Young Shell was. Young Shell always helped the elders even when she didn't need to. She would spend all day helping others instead of playing with the other children. Only a few days before Young Shell was to become an Apprentice, her mother died from a unknown sickness. Apprenticeship:When Young Shell became Learning Shell she received the mentor that went by the name of Tree Bark. She learned fast ans stuck to her old child way of helping others more than herself, so that is why when Tree Bark died of drowning the leader suggested that she become a Healer Apprentice. Healer Apprenticeship: Learning Shell was excited when she found out she was going to become a Healer Apprentice, but soon realized hat it was not for her, memorizing the herbs was way to confusing to her so she decided to return to regular Training where she continued to do a wonderful job. Warriorhood: When Young Shell became Sea Shell she became well known throughout the tribe. She was a very successful hunter and she battles stupendously. She was the favorite to become general. The last general passed away from old age. Seaborn Arrow did as everyone expected and made Sea Shell into Sandblown Shell. General:[/b] Sandblown Shell is still the same old person but just with a high rank. This has not changed her kind ways. Roleplay Example: (When she was still Sea Shell) A small figure appeared in front of Sea Shell. It was not clear enough to make out but something was there. The figure was getting closer and closer. Sea Shell's curiosity's got the better of her and she mover toward the mysterious figure. She was close enough to touch it, sticking out her tan colored arm she went to reach for it. As she did the creature backed away and cringed. Tilting her head to the side she could clearly see that it was a rabbit. Looking at the white fuzzy creature she could also see hat the leg was broken. She knew she had to help this poor soul but is she took it back to the tribe they would kill it and eat it. Normally Sea Shell would do the same but there was something different about this rabbit. Using what she recalled from her Training to become a healer she patched up the rabbits wounds and decided to keep it as a pet. Holding the rabbit in both arms, she started to head back to the tribe. As she almost reached her hut the rabbit hurled its self from Sea Shells arms and scampered away into the woods. Home: Sandblown Shell"s home is a circular kind of shape.The place she sleeps is at the far end of the hut. The tool like area id in the center. She has a bunch of hand crafted shell decorations hung on the walls of her home. Pictures: Random: She likes shells  Random: She likes shells 
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Joined: Dec 2007 Gender: Female  Posts: 0 Karma: 1 |  | Re: Sandblown Shell~General~Female « Reply #1 on Dec 13, 2007, 7:23am » | |
I found a few spelling mistakes, Cass.
In Appearance: Sandblown Shell has wares[Either has or wears, take your pick.] a long blue dress and[With would be better here.] some blue shorts underneath.
In Personality: Sandblowen[Typo. XP] Shell is a very kind person.
In History: [It sort of bugs me that you didn't bold Childhood and General.] Only a few days before Young Shell was to become a[an, is the word that belongs there.] Apprentice he[Add a comma between apprentice and he, and make he a she.] mother died from a unknown sickness. She was[put the here.] favorite to become[after here should be general, after] the last general passed away from old age.
In Roleplay: As she did the creature back[should be backed] away and cringed.
Beautiful!
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|  | Re: Sandblown Shell~General~Female « Reply #2 on Jan 2, 2008, 3:19pm » | |
I fixed it all!
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Joined: Dec 2007 Gender: Female  Posts: 0 Karma: 1 |  | Re: Sandblown Shell~General~Female « Reply #3 on Jan 2, 2008, 3:22pm » | |
Alright, It looks good.
Accepted as General of the females.
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